HMD | April 2012

[these_balls]

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[greatestcool]

➥ Frank Archer | Fullmetal Alchemist (2003 anime) | determinator
➥ Isaac McDougal | Fullmetal Alchemist: Brotherhood | glaciates
➥ Wheatley | Portal | brilliantideas
➥ Uryuu Ryuunosuke | Fate/Zero | greatestcool

Okay, so I know I'm kind of the slowest thing ever. I have moments where I want to tag all the things!! and then other times I just won't do tags at all. I'm working on it, I promise!

I think my biggest issue right now is Wheatley's voice. I'm not sure I'm doing it right, tbqh. Any help with that would be appreciated!

[(Anonymous)]

Admittedly if you're worried about characterisation as Wheatley, I'd probably suggest reading some interviews (on anything) from his VO, Stephen Merchant as, apart from being a living organism, I've seen very little difference between the two.

Other than that I can't say much; I've never read/played/watched Fate/Zero, I've not read far enough into the FMA Manga (or seen any of Brotherhood for that matter) for Isaac crit, and I think, for what little they gave Archer, you have him spot on, or at least, you aren't heinously out of character with what you've done with him.

The friendliness with Kimblee confused me a bit before I looked into it- after doing so I can see has come alot from their interactions, and I'll admit I can't remember enough of the original series to blast it as OOC. If it is an OOC behaviour for Archer, I'll just say you cover it well, and really, it's very hard to stay entirely true to character when surrounded by overly cute, loveable critters.

All in all I have no complaints. It's be nice to seem him be a little more nefarious though, if only because that's the one thing I do remember him doing other than becoming robo-Archer

[greatestcool]

That's an excellent idea, anon! Thank you very much, I'll be sure to look into it! why didn't I do this before now anyway

I can actually explain what Archer is doing with Kimblee, though it admittedly does get into headcanon territory since we really only see a couple of sides of Archer in canon (smug, irritated, and more smug). The only canon character he's really close to is Kimbley (spelled that way so I can differentiate between the two of them) - so he just sort of latched onto Kimblee and has no intention of letting go. The names are totally the same, so they're the same person, right? :|b

He also arrived when the Rockets were showing up in Mahogany Town and was there for two months with only Kimblee, Gorthan, and a bunch of NPCs. Had he been somewhere else with other people to interact with, he wouldn't have latched on quite as hard and probably would have gotten bored and idled out lolwhoops.

I do intend for Archer to do some more horrible things with Team Rocket. He's really been enjoying what Kimblee's been up to so far, and let's face it, he's been here nearly seven months, he's bored. So attacking random NPCs and all that stuff is totally acceptable! \o/ no logic doesn't exist in Archer's world :|

If you have any other questions on his characterization, I can certainly answer them! Archer really doesn't get much characterization, so as I said, a lot of this is how he'd headcanonly react to things.

Thanks again! ♥

[(Anonymous)]

Not a problem, I'm glad I could help.

That makes a lot of sense actually about the Rockets, especially considering the whole HQ switcheroo. Admittedly you answered most of my questions there, but if I ever get confused again I'll ask.

Thanks for clarifying for me, that was really nice of you.

[greatestcool]

It's no problem! I love what twisted relationship Archer and Kimblee have developed and I'll TL;DR about it at any given opportunity!

[meatysoviet]

I'll throw my two cents here, because whatever.

Admittedly, I think the character Merchant played in the TV Show 'Extras' is an awful lot like Wheatley. I have no idea if you could catch a few episodes of that on YT or something, but that might give you an idea for what physical movements and reacting to non-apeture situations might entail if you could.

I have no idea if this is helpful or not, so here you go XD

[determinator]

This is an excellent idea! I'll see if I can find it! Thank you very much! ♥